Your employer is considering ways to adjust work hours and reduce them overall. You have been asked to provide suggestions on how to implement this change. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter Explain why you think reducing work hours is a good idea. Suggest how the work hours could be reduced. Describe how these changes could benefit the company.

Hello Sir, I hope you are doing great. I recently got your message about reducing the work
hours
for all the employees.
This
is the best idea to control the extra
labor
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.
In these
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days, the percentage of
the
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sale
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is quite low as
its
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it is
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winter season. People don't prefer to eat outside.
Therefore
, we can cut the working
hours
through
one hour
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unpaid lunch break. We can unpaid breaks to the employees
instead
of
half
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hour
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half-hour
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break. The second point is to put
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people on the floor at the right time. I mean, We can put strong workers during lunch and dinner rush. In that way, we can cut the
labor
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by giving them short shifts
instead
of long shifts. We need to pay 10% less if we reduce the
hours
. Our
labor
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percentage will
goes
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down if we follow both
the
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strategies. I think these two are the best solutions because your business will not
affect
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and you can save some money by controlling the
hours
. Please feel free to discuss
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me and write
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back if we will go with above mentioned steps. Yours truly, Shabnampreet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains a single main idea, so the structure is clearer.
task achievement
Improve your response by clearly explaining why reducing work hours is beneficial both for employees and the company.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone consistently throughout the letter. Avoid conversational language to match a professional setting.
task achievement
You provided concrete suggestions on how to implement the reduction of work hours.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are very polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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