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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. (re)

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. (re)
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The line graph and pie chart illustrate the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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rates
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,
as well as
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 the types of
crimes
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 committed in the United Kingdom over the past year.
Overall
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, it is evident that
crime
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rates
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 are significantly higher among adolescents and young adults, with the peak occurring in the early twenties.
Conversely
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,
crime
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rates
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 sharply decline with
age
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, becoming relatively low among individuals aged 30 to 60.
Additionally
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, violent
crime
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 accounts for nearly half of all
crimes
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 committed, making it the most common type of
crime
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. In more detail, the line graph shows that
crime
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rates
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 begin to rise at
age
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 12, with a notable increase from 16 to 20 years old. The
crime
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 rate reaches its peak at 80,000 reported cases at
age
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 20, before gradually declining to around 10,000 cases by
age
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 40. The decline continues steadily with
age
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, reaching the lowest rate at 64 years old, with less than 5,000 reported cases. The pie chart reveals that violent
crime
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 constitutes 46% of all criminal activities, making it the most prevalent type. Property
crime
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 and drug-related
crime
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 follow, accounting for 23% and 22% of the total
crimes
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, respectively. Public order
crimes
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 represent the smallest share, at just 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, rates, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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