The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions
The chart shows us information
of
the six different Change preposition
on
cities
underground Change noun form
cities'
railway
systems.
Overall
, Tokyo have
one of the highest amount of Change the verb form
has
passengers
per year among all six cities. In
contrast
London has the longest Add a comma
contrast,
route
and also
the oldest one.On the other hand
, Los Angeles represents as
the youngest underground Correct word choice
apply
railway
opened.
Tokyo has hegemony in passengers
number with 1927 millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
people per year using it.
Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, it has route
length which 3 times less compared to London's metro. London has the longest Correct article usage
a route
route
length with 394 kilometres, also
being
Wrong verb form
is
oldest
metro among all six Correct article usage
the oldest
of
metros and Change preposition
apply
having
Wrong verb form
has
opening
date Correct article usage
an opening
as
1863. Change preposition
of
On the other hand
, Los Angeles is considerably
small underground Correct article usage
a considerably
railway
system with only 28 kilometers
of Change the spelling
kilometres
route
length and having
the second lowest Unnecessary verb
apply
passengers
quantities which Change the noun form
passenger
is
50 Change the verb form
are
millions
, Change to singular
million
furthermore
it is the youngest Add a comma
furthermore,
railway
with date
of opening Add an article
the date
a date
as
2001.
Kyoto, compared to its brotherhood city Tokyo has the smallest Change preposition
in
passengers
number as 45 millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
people. Paris is Change preposition
apply
city
with the second highest metro with Correct article usage
the city
passengers
number per year as
1191 Change preposition
of
millions
. Washington DC has the third youngest underground Change to singular
million
railway
system.Submitted by dnm.best on
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