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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions
#data #railway #systems #six #cities #date #kilometers #route #passenger #numbers #year #millions
The chart shows us information
of
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on
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 the six different
cities
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cities'
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 underground
railway
 systems.
Overall
, Tokyo
have
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 one of the highest amount of
passengers
 per year among all six cities.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 London has the longest
route
 and
also
 the oldest one.
On the other hand
, Los Angeles represents
as
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the youngest underground
railway
 opened. Tokyo has hegemony in
passengers
 number with 1927
millions
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million
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of
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people per year using it.
Moreover
, it has
route
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a route
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 length which 3 times less compared to London's metro. London has the longest
route
 length with 394 kilometres,
also
being
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is
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oldest
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the oldest
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 metro among all six
of
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metros and
having
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has
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opening
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an opening
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 date
as
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of
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 1863.
On the other hand
, Los Angeles is
considerably
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a considerably
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 small underground
railway
 system with only 28
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
 length and
having
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the second lowest
passengers
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passenger
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 quantities which
is
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are
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 50
millions
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million
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,
furthermore
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furthermore,
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 it is the youngest
railway
 with
date
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the date
a date
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 of opening
as
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in
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 2001. Kyoto, compared to its brotherhood city Tokyo has the smallest
passengers
 number as 45
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people. Paris is
city
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the city
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 with the second highest metro with
passengers
 number per year
as
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of
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 1191
millions
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million
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. Washington DC has the third youngest underground
railway
 system.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, passengers, route, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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