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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph presents
comparison
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a comparison
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 between the proportion of the total films issued and the total ticket sold in a country
catogrized
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categorised
 by (drama,
comdey
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comedy
, fantasy and romance) with
clarifing
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clarifying
clarified
 changes between the years 1996 and 2006.
Overall
, the largest percentage of films released was for drama in both years,
while
comdey
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comedy
Comey
 was the most ticket sales type of
movie
.
According to
 the data, both
of
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the rate of ticket sales and the percentage of
movie
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movies
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 produced increased
singificantly
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significantly
 in 2006 for all
type
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types
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 of
movie
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movies
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 except for romance
movie
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movies
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.
for instance
, the percentage of
romatic
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romantic
aromatic
movie
producedtion
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production
 remained unchanged in 2006,
whlie
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while
 the proportion of selling
romatic
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romantic
movie
 tickets decreased slightly in the same year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movie with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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