The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart indicates the comparison number of adults joining different types of
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sports in one
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between 1997 and 2017.
In
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overall
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, there were increased trends in most of the sports,
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Cricket and Swimming. The most significant
increasement
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increase
is basketball, it has raised more than double, from 9
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people
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in 1997 to around 22 thousand in 2017.
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, there was
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descreased
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decrease
in cricket that was about 26 Thousand
people
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in 1997, and only about 8 thousand in the later year 2017.
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, we can see from the chart that number of
people
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participated in swimming was the same between 1997 and 2017. Other popular sports which are tennis, football and rugby have
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increased between
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milstones
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milestones
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. Particularly, we
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know that Football and Rugby
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quite similar numbers of
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in
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, about 31 and 49
thousands
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in the
year
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1997 and 2017 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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