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The charts below shot the average number of tourists visiting Fairmont Island each season ant hte main advantages and disadvantages of the island according to a tourist survey. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given charts display information about the proportions of people
visting
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visiting
 an
Island
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 called Fairmount during each season.
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, the results of a
questionnarie
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questionnaire
 summarize the key strengths and setbacks of the trip to Fairmount
Island
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,
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 the tourists.
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, during summer, the tourism rates
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 the
Island
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 peak. The key advantage
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 the experience of
tourist
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tourists
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 was the friendliness of people,
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 the greatest setback was the high expenses.
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 Fairmount
Island
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 hosts
tourist
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 all around the year, tourism climaxes in summer, as it reaches 600
thousands
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of
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visitors. The second most popular season to visit
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Island
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 is Spring, with an average of 100,000 tourists.
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 number drops to the half in Autumn, making winter the least popular season with the least number of visits. Based on the results of the
questionarrie
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questionnaire
questionaries
, the tourists' experience consisted of a mixture of
stengths
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strengths
 and weaknesses. The benevolent treatment from locals was by far the most common advantage, as it
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 40% of
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. The second most ubiquitous key feature is the eye-catching scenery, as it accounts for 37% of all
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. Culture comes third on
the advantages list
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the list of the advantages
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, exceeding good
accomodation
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accommodation
 by 1%. The expensive cost of living was the highlight of
disadvantages
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, as it accounts for almost half the
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. The lack of entertainment activities or facilities was the second most popular drawback.
Moroever
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However
, 20% of visitors found the weather to be
unplesent
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unpleasant
, making it third on the list.
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, the food quality was the least common disadvantage, accounting for only 5% of
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