The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart illustrates information about
survey
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a survey
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which is done in
australian
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Australian
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five cities about
individuals
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individuals'
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choice of drinking and buying and drinking
tea
and
coffee
.The data is calibrated in
percentage
.
Overall
,it can be noticed that
,
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The
percentage
of
people
was higher who bought
instant
coffee
as compared to fresh
coffee
.
whereas
majority
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the majority
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of
masses
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the masses
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visited to
caffee
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coffee
for drinking
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to drink
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tea
or
coffee
.
To begin
with, There was less difference in the
percentage
of
people
who bought
instant
and fresh
coffee
in
last
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the last
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four weeks which was just above 40% and approximately 46% in
sydney
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Sydney
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and Melbourne respectively
while
the percentile of
customer
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customers
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who went to caffee for drink
tea
or
coffee
was 60% in
sydney
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Sydney
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and around 62% in
melbourne
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Melbourne
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. In
Brisban
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Brisban,
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approximately 32 percent
people
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of people
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bought fresh
coffee
whereas
the figure of
masses
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the masses
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was just above 50% who bought
instant
coffe
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coffee
or went to
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a caffe
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caffe
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cafe
for drinking
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to drink
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tea
or
coffee
.In
adewlaide
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Adewlaide
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and
hobart
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Hobart
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percentage
was
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almost same of
masses
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the masses
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who bought fresh
coffee
that
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was under 40%and 50 and around 52 percent
people
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of people
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bought
instant
coffee
in same cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, percentage, people, instant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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