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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates information about
survey
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a survey
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 which is done in
australian
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Australian
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 five cities about
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 choice of drinking and buying and drinking
tea
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 and
coffee
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.The data is calibrated in
percentage
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.
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,it can be noticed that
,
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The
percentage
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 of
people
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 was higher who bought
instant
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coffee
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 as compared to fresh
coffee
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.
whereas
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majority
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the majority
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 of
masses
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the masses
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 visited to
caffee
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coffee
for drinking
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to drink
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tea
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 or
coffee
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.
To begin
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 with, There was less difference in the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who bought
instant
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 and fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks which was just above 40% and approximately 46% in
sydney
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Sydney
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 and Melbourne respectively
while
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 the percentile of
customer
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customers
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 who went to caffee for drink
tea
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 or
coffee
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 was 60% in
sydney
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Sydney
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 and around 62% in
melbourne
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Melbourne
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. In
Brisban
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Brisban,
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 approximately 32 percent
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people
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of people
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 bought fresh
coffee
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whereas
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 the figure of
masses
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the masses
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 was just above 50% who bought
instant
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coffe
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coffee
 or went to
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a caffe
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caffe
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cafe
for drinking
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to drink
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tea
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 or
coffee
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.In
adewlaide
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Adewlaide
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 and
hobart
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Hobart
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percentage
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was
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apply
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almost same of
masses
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the masses
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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that
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apply
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was under 40%and 50 and around 52 percent
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people
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of people
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 bought
instant
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coffee
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 in same cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, percentage, people, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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