The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the production cycle of
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, its
a seven stages, man-made, linear process. It begins with growing the cane and ending with Correct your spelling
it's
sugar
drying and cooling.
First of all, sugar
canes
needs about 12-18 months to grow, after that it is harvested manually by Fix the agreement mistake
cane
hands
or by harvesting trucks. The canes Fix the agreement mistake
hand
then
placed into a big crushing machine in order to make juice.
Following that, the juice Add a missing verb
are then
has been
purified using Wrong verb form
is
limestone
filter, which is evaporated using heat, where the juice turn Correct article usage
a limestone
to
Change preposition
into
a
syrup. Correct article usage
apply
Then
, the sugar
crystals seperated
from the syrup using Correct your spelling
separated
centrifugation
technique. Correct article usage
a centrifugation
Finally
, at the last
stage
the Add a comma
stage,
sugar
crystals were dried and cooled down.Submitted by hazarbakhit on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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