The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the production cycle of

sugar

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from

sugar

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cane.

Overall

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its

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it's

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a seven stages, man-made, linear process. It begins with growing the cane and ending with

sugar

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drying and cooling. First of all,

sugar

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canes

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cane

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needs about 12-18 months to grow, after that it is harvested manually by

hands

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hand

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or by harvesting trucks. The canes

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then

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are then

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placed into a big crushing machine in order to make juice. Following that, the juice

has been

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purified using

limestone

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a limestone

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filter, which is evaporated using heat, where the juice turn

Change preposition

into

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Correct article usage

apply

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syrup.

Then

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, the

sugar

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crystals

seperated

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separated

from the syrup using

centrifugation

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a centrifugation

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technique.

Finally

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, at the

last

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stage

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stage,

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the

sugar

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crystals were dried and cooled down.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

115 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultivation
harvesting
mechanically
juice extraction
purifying
impurities
evaporation
concentration
crystallization
centrifuges
distribution

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