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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, the table shows where the money came from and the charts show, how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, the table shows where the money came from and the charts show, how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts give information about the police Office budget in an area of the UK.
Whereas
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 the table describes the source of money, pie charts illustrate how money was spent.
Overall
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, in 2018 Police Budget was greater than in 2017, with all 3
sources
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, which are national government, local taxes and other
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. It can be seen that the greatest expenditure was salaries for both of the years. When the police budget table is observed, 175.7m, 91.2
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 and 38m in 2017, for national governments, local taxes and other
sources
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 respectively. In 2018, national government
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 increased by 2.3m. The greatest improvement is in local taxes which is 11.1m. Other
sources
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 increased only 0.5m. The percentage of building and transport
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 remained steadily 1o 2017 to 2018.
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 the proportion of money spent
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was decreased by 75% to 69% ,the proportion of technology expenditure was
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raised by
 8% to14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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