Some people think painting and drawings are important as other subjects. They should be compulsory in high school education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is known that growing and consuming cannabis
have
become legal in Canada. There are some advantages of Change the verb form
has
such
decision
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a decision
as well as
disadvantages, such
as an increase in the government budget income and people
pour
out on the streets for a riot, respectively.
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pouring
in
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apply
one’s
revenue increase and Change noun form
one
also
allows the proper institutions to take control over the quality of the weed. (The?) Illegal business, which is run by an individual group of people
, leads to all cash to be
settled down in these Change the verb form
being
people
pockets and Change noun form
people's
bring
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bringing
the
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apply
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weed
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weeds
have
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has
smoking
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and smoking
which
may result in lethal Correct pronoun usage
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outcome
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outcomes
For example
, the
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a
Canada’s
newspaper published an (Change noun form
Canada
the
?) article about the recent increase in the government budget and below that was the chart of Correct article usage
apply
death
rate from cannabis usage, which indicated that it Correct article usage
the death
have
dropped to almost zero after the law enforcement.
Despite the pros of legalisation of weed consumption, it brings up many complaints that the government can’t satisfy the demand and riots may take place. Because many plantations get closed up, Correct subject-verb agreement
has
thus
shortening the production of weed, which can’t cover the previous rate of grass usage, many unsatisfied people
complain and even uprisings can occur. For instance
, the local news channel took several interviews from people
on the street, who complained that they want
to smoke some pot, but Wrong verb form
wanted
can’t
find it anywhere and some of them rushed outside to proclaim their needs.
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puts
more money into the state budget and drops to minimal chances of death from smoking, Change the verb form
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although
the consumers might bring uprisings into the country.Submitted by dulskywork on
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