You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start
Dear Mr Alland,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you about ‘Jarvis’
project that should Correct article usage
the ‘Jarvis’
starts
next week.
Right now, my team faces Change the verb form
start
with
some problems regarding permissions and Change preposition
apply
documentations
. There are some divisions that reject it. They worry our data will be leaked out; Fix the agreement mistake
documentation
hence
this
work is using open-source libraries.
Therefore
, this
project will not make it to the next phase next week; hence
I need to do some negotiations with related teams. Unfortunately, even if they approve it; yet, it still needs 2 weeks for the approvals.
In fact, I believe this
project can start probably 3 weeks from now. I apologize for reporting bad news to you. I will start the discussions with them at 3.00PM tomorrow. Thank you for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you shortly.
Yours sincerely,Submitted by riani.the2 on
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce yourself and mention that you are the new employee. This adds clarity to your letter and ensures that your new employer understands the context immediately.
coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'that should starts next week,' 'faces with some problems,' and 'yet, it still needs 2 weeks.' Consider revising for correctness and clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are very professional and appropriate.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which makes your letter well-organized and easy to follow.
task achievement
You have managed to convey the necessary information, including explaining the situation and problems, as well as providing an estimated start time.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite