The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
A glance at the given bar charts depicts the rate of individuals who participated in
a
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educational system in developed and developing
countries
in two different
years
.
Overall
, it is obvious that industrialised
countries
have
higher
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level of expenditure on Research and progress.
In addition
, the number of scientists in developed
countries
are
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significantly more than the
people
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number of people
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lived
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in
countires
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countries
counties
where were developing in 1980 and 1990. Actually,
people
spent more
years
in education in comparison with the other types of
countries
.
People
in developed
countries
spent
staggering
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10
years
on
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studying in 1990.
Although
the developed
countries
have over 60 scientists from 1000
people
,
this
rate was merely under 20
researcher
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researchers
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in both 1980 and 1990
years
. The money
was
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spent
for
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educational goals witnessed
sharply
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increased from 150
billions
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dollors
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dollars
to 320
billions
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dollors
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dollars
.
However
, it can be seen dramatically decrease in the mentioned
statistic
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statistics
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in developing
countrie
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countries
and
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reached
negligible
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120
billions
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billion
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dollors
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dollars
per
a
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year.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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