The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
A glance at the given bar charts depicts the rate of individuals who participated in
a
educational system in developed and developing Change the article
an
countries
in two different years
.
Overall
, it is obvious that industrialised countries
have higher
level of expenditure on Research and progress. Add an article
a higher
In addition
, the number of scientists in developed countries
are
significantly more than the Change the verb form
is
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
lived
in Change the form of the verb
living
countires
where were developing in 1980 and 1990. Actually, Correct your spelling
countries
counties
people
spent more years
in education in comparison with the other types of countries
.
People
in developed countries
spent staggering
10 Correct article usage
a staggering
years
on
studying in 1990. Change preposition
apply
Although
the developed countries
have over 60 scientists from 1000 people
, this
rate was merely under 20 researcher
in both 1980 and 1990 Fix the agreement mistake
researchers
years
.
The money was
spent Unnecessary verb
apply
for
educational goals witnessed Change preposition
on
sharply
increased from 150 Correct article usage
a sharply
billions
Change to singular
billion
dollors
to 320 Correct your spelling
dollars
billions
Change to singular
billion
dollors
. Correct your spelling
dollars
However
, it can be seen dramatically decrease in the mentioned statistic
in developing Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
countrie
Correct your spelling
countries
and
reached Correct word choice
apply
negligible
120 Correct article usage
a negligible
billions
Change to singular
billion
dollors
per Correct your spelling
dollars
a
year.Correct article usage
apply
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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