A glance at the provided pie charts reveal how many hours are spent in the library by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to all students at university of Britain.

A glance at the provided pie charts reveal how many hours are spent in the library by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to all students at university of Britain.
The information about
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comparison
of properties of undergraduate and postgraduate
students
to all
students
in British universities and numbers of
hours
spend in
library
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the library
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.
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by pie charts .
Overall
, the dominant percentage of all charts is undergraduate
students
which
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spend
1to
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1 to
7
hours
in contrast
the least proportion is
same
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group spend more than 15
hours
in
library
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the library
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.
Students
spend
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who spend
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time from 8 to 14
hours
in
library
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amongst all groups have almost
same
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the same
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proportion
by
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32%,28%and 35%
while
all
students
and
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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who spend 15
hours
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lowest
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the lowest
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percentage .All
students
15 % follow undergraduate 9% .
On the other hand
rates for
post graduate
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postgraduate
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spend
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more than 15
house
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approximately half of
total
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the total
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proportion .
Percentage
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The percentage
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of
students
who stay in
library
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the library
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from 1 to 7
hours
for all
students
got exactly half portion
while
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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got more than all
students
by 13%
at the end
postgraduate university
student
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students
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have
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had
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17%.
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