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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives data on
divorce
percentage
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percentages
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 in
Sweden
 and
Finland
 in the period of time between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
,
although
 in the
beginning
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Finland
's split
rate
 was lower than in
Sweden
, in the
end
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end,
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divorce
 percentage in
the
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Finland
 surpassed
Sweden
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. It is
also
 noticeable that
Finland
 observed an upward trend despite
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fluctuation
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,
while
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 performance increased during 5
years
.
However
,
divorce
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the divorce
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rate
 in
Finland
 constituted just below 40% in 2011 and after
slight
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a slight
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 decrease and
small
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a small
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 boom, it made up nearly
in
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the same position of 40% in 2012. It is obvious that the minimum in
this
 chart was seen in 2012 in
Finland
 being nearly 33%. During
next
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the next
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 3
years
indicator
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indicators
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 for
Finland
 went up and outperformed
Sweden
 in 2015 with their rates being approximately 41% and 37% respectively.
Divorce
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rate
 in
Sweden
 boomed in 2012 being 49% which was the maximum
among
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in
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 all
years
 for both countries.
In addition
 after 3
years
' decline
divorce
rate
 for
Sweden
 made up about 36% which was its minimum.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, sweden, finland, rate, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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