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You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course : learn new skills Say how much cooking you have done since the course : made threelayed cakes, Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer - specialise in wedding course

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 to provide you
my
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with my
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overall
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 feedback on your famous cookery course " Delighted
Cakes
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". I have completed
three
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a
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month
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three-month
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 crash course which is called Delighted
Cakes
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,and I have wonderful experience with one of your
instructor
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,Miss Joan , She taught me how to bake multi-layered
cakes
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 in an hour .
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, I
also
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learn
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learned
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 how to make
gluten free
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gluten-free
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cakes
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, which would be amazing for me and my husband because they have
allergy
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an allergy
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from
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to
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 gluten,
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i
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I
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 can cook special treats for them now. After school , I
am making
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cakes
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 for my friend's birthdays
as well as
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 for my family every two weeks. I used my school notes in order to give
flawless
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a flawless
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 look to my homemade
cakes
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. I am thinking
to make
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of making
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 my hobby
as
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apply
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a profession for weddings ,so
i
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I
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 would like to ask you about the Wedding Course .If any seats
available
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are available
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this
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september
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September
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 please inform me
immediatley
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immediately
, so
i
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 can submit my application for enrollment. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal kaur.

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coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and issues with punctuation. Consider a more thorough proofread to catch small mistakes like 'I have wonderful experience' should be 'I had a wonderful experience' and 'they have allergy from gluten' should be 'they have an allergy to gluten.'
coherence cohesion
Consider refining some sentences to improve clarity and flow. For example, 'After school , I am making cakes' could be 'Since completing the course, I have been making cakes.'
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear beginning, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You provided specific examples of what you enjoyed and how the course has impacted your cooking.
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