You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course : learn new skills Say how much cooking you have done since the course : made threelayed cakes, Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer - specialise in wedding course
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
to provide you my
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with my
overall
feedback on your famous cookery course " Delighted Cakes
".
I have completed three
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a
month
crash course which is called Delighted Correct your spelling
three-month
Cakes
,and I have wonderful experience with one of your instructor
,Miss Joan , She taught me how to bake multi-layered Fix the agreement mistake
instructors
cakes
in an hour . Moreover
, I also
learn
how to make Wrong verb form
learned
gluten free
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gluten-free
cakes
, which would be amazing for me and my husband because they have allergy
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an allergy
from
gluten, Change preposition
to
thus
, i
can cook special treats for them now.
After school , I Change the capitalization
I
am making
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make
cakes
for my friend's birthdays as well as
for my family every two weeks. I used my school notes in order to give flawless
look to my homemade Correct article usage
a flawless
cakes
.
I am thinking to make
my hobby Change preposition
of making
as
a profession for weddings ,so Change preposition
apply
i
would like to ask you about the Wedding Course .If any seats Change the capitalization
I
available
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are available
this
september
please inform me Change the capitalization
September
immediatley
, so Correct your spelling
immediately
i
can submit my application for enrollment.
I look forward to your reply.
Yours faithfully,
Roopkamal kaur.Change the capitalization
I
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coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and issues with punctuation. Consider a more thorough proofread to catch small mistakes like 'I have wonderful experience' should be 'I had a wonderful experience' and 'they have allergy from gluten' should be 'they have an allergy to gluten.'
coherence cohesion
Consider refining some sentences to improve clarity and flow. For example, 'After school , I am making cakes' could be 'Since completing the course, I have been making cakes.'
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear beginning, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You provided specific examples of what you enjoyed and how the course has impacted your cooking.