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the line chart show prison population in a european country from 1911 to 2001

the line chart show prison population in a european country from 1911 to 2001
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The
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 graph compares the amount of
prisoners
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 in a European area over 90
years
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 from 1911.
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a contrasting trend in the prison population
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Whilst the highest number of
prison
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 was recorded from males,
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 can be seen in females showing
consistent
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a consistent
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 decrease in given
years
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. In 1911, under 20,000 male
prisoners
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 were shown, six times higher than 3,200 female ones.
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 figure remained ten
years
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 later before decreasing in 1931,
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 a low at 10,000
prisoners
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. Before recovering 20,000, the figure experienced
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consistent stability until 1971, after which it rose dramatically to 40,000 in 1981. And
then
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, the number sharply grew
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before
finally
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peaked
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 at 45,000 in 2001.
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, the number of female
prisoners
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 witnessed a dramatic decline in the
30
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30-year
years
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 period from 1911, and
then
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 it reached a trough at 6,000 in 1941.
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 figure later increased gradually in the next
years
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 till 1961, before returning under 1,000
prisoners
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 in 1971. After
which
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, it experienced
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steady growth in
prison
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 population and stood at 1,800 people in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prisoners, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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