The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
that
the Correct word choice
apply
number
of employed
Add an article
an employed
the employed
individual
by Change to a plural noun
individuals
a
occupation type and sex for Australia Correct article usage
apply
recent
Change preposition
in recent
year
.
Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
, in 5 of 7 job types number
of men was greater than women. There was Correct article usage
the number
significant
difference Correct article usage
a significant
number
of females
and Fix the agreement mistake
female
males worker
in the types of Fix the agreement mistake
male workers
Managgers
, Tradespeople and Production.Correct your spelling
managers
Unit
was measured by 1000s.
Add an article
The unit
Males
were tend
to be Change the verb form
tended
manager
three times Fix the agreement mistake
managers
of
Change preposition
as
female
. Tradespeople Fix the agreement mistake
females
was
the most significant difference, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
males
are 8 times more in than women, which was by 100 to 900. In production
Correct article usage
the production
field
it can be observed Add a comma
field,
the
Correct article usage
a
smiliar
pattern, Correct your spelling
similar
which
Change preposition
in which
number
of female workers was 100 and Change the article
a number
the number
males
just
over 500. Add a missing verb
was just
Additionaly
, count of employed women in semiprofessionals and Correct your spelling
Additionally
laboures
are fewer than men.
Correct your spelling
labourers
On the other hand
, Female professionals are greater than male
, which is 600 and between 500 and 600, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
males
Highest
Add an article
The highest
number
of people worked as clerical compared to rest
of the job types. Correct article usage
the rest
Number
of female clerical Change the article
A number
The number
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
also
greater than count
of men.Add an article
the count
a count
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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