You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
of
the
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employed individuals by occupation type and sex for Australia in recent
year
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.
Overall
, in 5 of 7 job
types
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types,
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the
number
of men was greater than women. There was a significant difference
number
of female and male workers in the types of managers, Tradespeople and Production.The unit was measured by 1000s.
Males
tended to be managers three times
as
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females. Tradespeople were the most significant difference,
males
are 8 times more in than women, which was by 100 to 900. In the production field, it can be observed a similar pattern, in which the
number
of female workers was 100 and
males
was just over 500.
Additionally
, count of employed women in semiprofessionals and labourers
are
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fewer than men.
On the other hand
, Female professionals are greater than
males
, which is 600 and between 500 and 600, respectively. The highest
number
of people worked as clerical compared to the rest of the job types. The
number
of female clerical was
also
greater than the count of men.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employed persons
  • job type
  • sex
  • employment figures
  • gender distribution
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • casual
  • professionals
  • managers
  • technicians
  • service workers
  • clerical staff
  • laborers
  • skilled trades
  • predominantly
  • discrepancy
  • proportionally
  • sectors
  • industries
  • dominance
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