Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is often argued that some
specialist
, Fix the agreement mistake
specialists
such
as doctors and engineers, should have the freedom to work in any country
of their choice, however
, some think that they must be working in a country
where they did training. In my opinion
I think they should have Add a comma
opinion,
freedom
to work in a Add an article
the freedom
country
where they are willing to because of less
opportunities and lower salaries in a Change the quantifier
fewer
country
they
did training.
To embark on, Rephrase
where they
people
move
to different countrues
for better future opportunities and experiences which help them grow personally and professionally. Professions Correct your spelling
countries
such
as doctors and engineers are very common in India and every parent want
their children to pursue it and Change the verb form
wants
as a
result
their more unemployed skilled professionals than required. Add a comma
result,
This
is one of the reasons people
move
abroad and
earn higher salaries and expand their knowledge through experience. Correct word choice
apply
For instance
, in UAE, the number of Indians working in hospitals and huge companies is much highter
than the locals.
Correct your spelling
higher
On the other hand
, according to
some people
professionals must work in a Add a comma
people,
country
where they received
training Wrong verb form
receive
as
to pay back to Change preposition
apply
country
. During training, Add an article
the country
people
use several resources and services and it is their responsibility to pay back to country
which invested in them and contribute their knowledge and skills to the development of their own nation. Add an article
the country
a country
However
, individuals have freedom
to Add an article
the freedom
move
abroad to their dream country
.
To recapitulate, professionals, such
ad
doctors and engineers, are believed to be working in a Correct your spelling
as
cluntry
where they Correct your spelling
country
trained
but some Add a missing verb
are trained
also
think they are free to move
to another country
for several resons
Correct your spelling
reasons
such
as to have highter
salaries and knowledge through their experience in another countries and I agree that Correct your spelling
higher
people
should be free to move
to their dream countries.Submitted by Xyz person
on
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