The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities
The given chart and the graph show details on medium usual uppermost and undermost Celsius
degrees
and the average amount of rainy days
.
It can be seen that,
the maximum temperatures in Remove the comma
apply
Brisbane
in February are the highest. Moreover
, Brisbane
has experienced more wet days
than Canberra
.
The maximum degree in Brisbane
starts at 27 centigrade in January before growing to 30 degrees
in the next month. Then
it falls down by 10 units in April. In the next 8 months,the maximum temperature in Brisbane
grow gradually to nearly 30 Celsius degrees
. Meanwhile, from January to July, the uppermost degrees
in Canberra
decrease sharply from 26 to 12 before rising significantly back to 26 at the end
of the year. In terms of Brisband
's minimum temperatures starts at 20 in the beginning. After a small decrease in the middle of the year, it increases to 20 degrees
in December. Additionally
, Carrbera's undermost Celsius declined from around 12 to 0 in the first part of the year and grew to 12 in the remained part.
Regarding the
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The
Brisband
's average amount of rainy days
in January is roughly 13 which is 6 days
higher than in Canbera
. Correct your spelling
Canberra
Next,
the medium wet days
in Brisbane
in February, March, and April are 14 days
while
in Canberra
are around 7 days
. In addition
, the average amount of pouring days
in Canbera
in June, July, August, and September are equal to Correct your spelling
Canberra
Brisbane
in May and November which all are 7 days
. Plus, the average wet days
in June, July, August and September in Brisband
are 10 days
which is exactly equelant
to the average Correct your spelling
equal
days
with rainfall in Canberra
in May, November, December
.
Correct word choice
and December
Finally
, the medium wet days
in September of Canberra
is around 8 day
Fix the agreement mistake
days
while
the same figure in the last
3 months in Brisband
are 8,10, and 12 Correct your spelling
Brisbane
days
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