The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The given graphs
illustrates
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the
temperature
and average amount of
days
with rainfall in two different cities namely
Brisbane
and
Canberra
. Looking from an
overall
perspective, despite the fluctuation, the
temperature
in
Brisbane
is always higher than
Canberra
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in Canberra
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throughout the
year
. Meanwhile, there are more rainy
days
in
Brisbane
in most of the months except for May, June, August and September. A closer look at the line graph clearly shows that
Canberra
and
Brisbane
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Brisbane's
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minimum
temperature
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temperatures
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experiences
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experience
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similar
trend
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trends
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. The former started at 10
Celsius
degree
and decreased significantly to nearly 0
Celsius
degree
in August before
recovered
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recovering
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back to over 10
degree
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degrees
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by the end of the
year
. The latter saw the same drop but from 15
Celsius
degree
to under 10
degree
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degrees
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then
rose back to over 15
degree
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degrees
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in December. The maximum
temperature
in both
Brisbane
and
Canberra
started and ended the
year
at over 25
Celsius
degree
,
however
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the latter shows
greater
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a greater
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difference between summer and winter as it hit the bottom at 15
degree
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degrees
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in July
while
the former’s lowest point was just under 25
degree
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degrees
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. Moving on the bar chart, the figure for rainy
days
in
Brisbane
decreased from 20 to 10
days
in the first half of the
year
before quickly
increase
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increasing
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to nearly 20
days
in the other half of the
year
. Rain pattern in
Canberra
witnessed a fluctuation between 10 and 15
of
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apply
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rainy
days
each
months
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month
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with July being the month with the least amount of rain.
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