The graph and the chart below give information on avarage daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the avareage number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below give information on avarage daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the avareage number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant.
The given chart and the graph show details on medium usual uppermost and undermost Celsius
degrees
and the average amount of rainy
days
. It can be seen that
,
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the maximum temperatures in
Brisband
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Brisbane
in
Ferbuary
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February
is
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are
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the highest.
Moreover
,
Brisband
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Brisbane
has experienced more wet
days
than
Carberra
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Canberra
. The maximum
degrees
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degree
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in
Brisband
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Brisbane
starts
with
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at
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27 centigrade in
Jannuary
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January
before
grows
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growing
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to 30
degrees
in the next month.
Then
it falls down by 10 units in April. In the next 8 months,the maximum temperatures in
Brisbands
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Brisbane
grows
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gradually to nearly 30 Celsius
degrees
. Meanwhile, from January to July, the uppermost
degrees
in
Carberra
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Canberra
decreases
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decrease
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sharply from 26 to 12 before go
rises
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rise
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significantly back to 26
in
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at
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the end of the year. In terms of
Brisband
's minimum temperatures
which
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is
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it
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starts
with
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at
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20 in the
begining
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beginning
. After a small decrease in the middle of the
years
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year
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, it
increase
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increases
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to 20
degrees
in December.
Additionally
, Carrbera's undermost Celsius
degrees
decline from around 12 to 0 in the first part of the
years
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year
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and
grow
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grew
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to 12 in the remained part. Regarding the
Brisband
's average amount of rainy
days
in January which is roughly 13 which is 6
days
higher than in
Carrbera
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Carrboro
.
Next,
the medium wet
days
in
Brisband
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Brisbane
in
Ferbuary
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February
, March,
April
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and April
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are 14
days
while
in
Caberra
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Canberra
are around 7
days
.
In addition
, the average amount of pouring
days
in
Carrbera
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Carrboro
in June, July, August,
September
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and September
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are equal to the same figure in
Brisband
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Brisbane
in May and November which all are 7
days
. Plus, the average wet
days
in Jun, July, August and September in
Brisband
are 10
days
which is exactly equal
with
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the average
days
with rainfall
of
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in
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Carberra
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Canberra
in May, November,
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and Decemeber
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Decemeber
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December
.
Finally
, the medium wet
days
in September of
Carberra
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Canberra
is around 8
days
while
the same figure in the
last
3
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months
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moths
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months
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in
Brisband
are 8,10,
12
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and 12
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days
(respectively)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, days, brisband, carberra with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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