The graph and the chart below give information on avarage daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the avareage number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart and the graph show details on medium usual uppermost and undermost Celsius
degrees
and the average amount of rainy days
.
It can be seen that,
the maximum temperatures in Remove the comma
apply
Brisband
in Correct your spelling
Brisbane
Ferbuary
Correct your spelling
February
is
the highest. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Moreover
, Brisband
has experienced more wet Correct your spelling
Brisbane
days
than Carberra
.
The maximum Correct your spelling
Canberra
degrees
in Fix the agreement mistake
degree
Brisband
starts Correct your spelling
Brisbane
with
27 centigrade in Change preposition
at
Jannuary
before Correct your spelling
January
grows
to 30 Wrong verb form
growing
degrees
in the next month. Then
it falls down by 10 units in April. In the next 8 months,the maximum temperatures in Brisbands
Correct your spelling
Brisbane
grows
gradually to nearly 30 Celsius Wrong verb form
will grow
degrees
. Meanwhile, from January to July, the uppermost degrees
in Carberra
Correct your spelling
Canberra
decreases
sharply from 26 to 12 before go Correct subject-verb agreement
decrease
rises
significantly back to 26 Correct subject-verb agreement
rise
in
the end of the year. In terms of Change the preposition
at
Brisband
's minimum temperatures which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
is
starts Correct your spelling
it
with
20 in the Change preposition
at
begining
. After a small decrease in the middle of the Correct your spelling
beginning
years
, it Fix the agreement mistake
year
increase
to 20 Change the verb form
increases
degrees
in December. Additionally
, Carrbera's undermost Celsius degrees
decline from around 12 to 0 in the first part of the years
and Fix the agreement mistake
year
grow
to 12 in the remained part.
Regarding the Wrong verb form
grew
Brisband
's average amount of rainy days
in January which is roughly 13 which is 6 days
higher than in Carrbera
. Correct your spelling
Carrboro
Next,
the medium wet days
in Brisband
in Correct your spelling
Brisbane
Ferbuary
, March, Correct your spelling
February
April
are 14 Correct word choice
and April
days
while
in Caberra
are around 7 Correct your spelling
Canberra
days
. In addition
, the average amount of pouring days
in Carrbera
in June, July, August, Correct your spelling
Carrboro
September
are equal to the same figure in Correct word choice
and September
Brisband
in May and November which all are 7 Correct your spelling
Brisbane
days
. Plus, the average wet days
in Jun, July, August and September in Brisband
are 10 days
which is exactly equal with
the average Change preposition
to
days
with rainfall of
Change preposition
in
Carberra
in May, November, Correct your spelling
Canberra
Correct word choice
and Decemeber
Decemeber
.
Correct your spelling
December
Finally
, the medium wet days
in September of Carberra
is around 8 Correct your spelling
Canberra
days
while
the same figure in the last
3 Correct your spelling
months
moths
in Correct your spelling
months
Brisband
are 8,10, 12
Correct word choice
and 12
days
(respectively)Submitted by midden-02.tore on
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