Countries with long avarage working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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path is different in any country. It is often argued that wealthy nations adopt long working
time
whereas
employees in poor countries have reduced shifts.
However
,
this
essay disagrees because short work days increase productivity and the
time
to spend money.
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first advantage of countries with short
avarage
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average
working
time
is that employees are more productive. Numerous jobs require high concentration and eccessive work can
leads
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in
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tiredness and fatigue,
readucing
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reducing
individual's
capacities
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capacity
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to think and act
effectivelly
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effectively
and
rising
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raising
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possible mistakes.
For instance
, many
people
are not only responsible for themselves but
also
for other
people
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lives and
a
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error can
became
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a tragedy.
For instance
, in 2011 in
Rome
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Rome,
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a bus driver fell
a sleep
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asleep
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during a double shift causing the death of 9 passengers.
Moreover
, long working shifts do not leave many free
time
to
people
. In order to be economically successful a country
need
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consumers. After working
mostly
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most
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of the day,
people
prefer to go home rather
then
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go shopping or
at
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the
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restaurants and
this
results in many small
business
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businesses
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forced
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to shut
due
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to the lack of customers, with a
generel
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general
lost
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of funds for
all
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the country. A good example
are
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the consequences of Covid-19 where the closure of vacation structures, restaurants, and shops
have
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caused a global economic regression. In conclusion,
although
if
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some countries
believed
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that long shifts can increase national well-being, short working hours are actually more beneficial. Overwhelmed
people
are more likely to commit mistakes
whereas
rest
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the rest
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employees are more productive and better consumers.
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task achievement
The essay presents clear and relevant examples to support its main points, such as the Rome bus driver incident and the economic impacts of COVID-19.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and conclusion are well-structured, providing a clear framework and summary of the essay's main arguments.
task achievement
The essay makes a compelling argument by connecting shorter working hours to increased productivity and better consumer activity.

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