More and more people want to buy famous brands ofclothes, carsand other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In
today
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world with
dominance
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the dominance
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of capitalism, many people buy more items than before, particularly luxury
one
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such
as
brand name
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clothes and cars. In
this
essay, the reasons behind
this
situation will be discussed in detail and examine whether
this
can
has
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positive or negative consequences.
To begin
with, there are many reasons behind
this
individual behaviour, one of the key factors is high social
standard
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standards
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.
According to
the advancement of social media, people nowadays
have
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influenced by others with high financial status in
the
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social media.
Therefore
, owning some luxury
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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and showing
them
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it
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off will gain
respectance
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respect
and acceptance of
community
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the community
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.
Additionally
, the numerous
of
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marketing advertisements are sent directly to consumers, significantly
encoraging
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encouraging
them to purchase more frequently.
Consequently
, there are many potential
benfits
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benefits
it provides.
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the
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social perspective,
this
apporach
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approach
promoting
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whole
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country's
economic
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, as an
increase
in
demand
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the demand
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of
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citizen
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citizens
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and rising
of
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in
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selling products.
This
could lead to an
increase
in
productivity
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the productivity
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of
manufactures
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manufacturers
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and factories, thereby many companies tend to require more
workfores
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workforces
workforce
, resulting in
increase
employments
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in employments
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. On the individual side, owning
desire
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desired
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items could be a
self-fulfillment
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for someone, which gives them
feeling
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a feeling
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of
satastification
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stratification
sanctification
.
Moreover
,
this
can reduce large amounts of stress,
particulary
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particularly
who work in a stressful career
such
as
doctor
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doctors
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,
lawyer
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lawyers
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or
worker
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workers
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.
However
,
this
behaviour can bring negative impacts.
For instance
, buying
an unnecessary and unaffordable items
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unnecessary and unaffordable items
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,
causing
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financial problems in individuals. In conclusion,
this
situation offers both social and individual benefits
such
as promoting social economic,
increase
in employment, serving as
self fulfillment
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self-fulfillment
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and reducing stress.
While
, without careful thinking,
this
causes
in
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financial issues, I firmly
beleive
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believe
that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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