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Some feel that students should not have to take standardized tests in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Standardized
tests
 have become common in many schools. In my opinion, standardized
tests
 should be eliminated from schools for two major reasons.
First,
standardized
tests
 create a stressful environment for
students
 who already have other commitments.
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 they have other activities after school. If they need to prepare for an
examination
, they will have various tasks to do.
For example
, some
students
 work a part-time job that
require
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 at least 4-5 hours per day after school. If they need to practice for standardized
tests
, they will need to manage time after their work.
As a result
, they are heavy workload
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 to high pressure and stress.
Moreover
, if there are frequent
tests
 throughout the term,
student
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 may experience anxiety, which can negatively impact their performance.
For instance
, some schools frequently administer
tests
 every week or after
lessons
.
Students
 need to practice and review their
lessons
 almost every day.
Students
 may have less time for relaxation and may feel anxious about their test which can affect their attention and cognitive abilities during
lessons
.
As a result
, they may not achieve high scores on standardized
tests
.
Second,
standardized
tests
 often have a narrow focus. These examinations often prioritize rote memorization and test-taking strategies.
Students
 need to memorize the
lessons
 for the test rather than develop critical thinking skills.
Therefore
, they may quickly forget when
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 period ends.
In addition
, the type of standardized
tests
 may discourage critical thinking and creative problem-solving. They simply focus on memorizing the
lessons
 for the
examination
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 not analyze the
lessons
 to apply them to their lives. When they transition to advance education, they may
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 it difficult to adapt their learning strategies. In conclusion, I think
students
 should not take
tests
 in school because
tests
 cause stress and
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often promote only memorization. If
students
 do not need to take the
examination
, they may experience less stress and have more time to focus on other subjects or activities.
Students
 will
happier
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 and develop
positive
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a positive
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 attitude toward learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized tests
  • measure
  • abilities
  • knowledge
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • narrow
  • curriculum
  • alternative assessment methods
  • comprehensive evaluation
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