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In the future all cars, uses and trucks will be dirverless. This only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advatages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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All transportation
vehicles
 will not need
drivers
 anymore in the
the
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near future and the only
people
 inside those will be passengers.
This
 essay will explain that the benefits of driverless
vehicles
 which are
less
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 road casualties and traffic jams have more impact than the drawbacks which are lacking the joy of driving and the trust of
people
. First of all, not having the joy of riding a car and the trust of
people
 to ride are the negative points. Some
people
 do not
drvie
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drive
just to reach their destinations, they want to roam the streets and enjoy a beautiful night view from their car windows.
Therefore
, they want to drive their
cars
 themselves. Another point is that
,
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 some individuals doubt the capability of self-driving
cars
. They believe that driving is a complex task and computers cannot run it well.
As a result
, they will not get in a car without a human driver.
However
, I believe that there are friendly race matches around cities to quench the thirst of
drivers
, and with safe demonstrations on social
medias
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,
people
 can trust driverless
vehicles
.
On the other hand
, saving
people
`s lives and time
are
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the
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 considerable positive
points
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 that self-driving transportation can give residents. The complex programs using AI technology
has
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 enabled humanity to introduce
cars
 without
drivers
 using AIs that can make critical decisions in vital moments to save
people
`s lives from road accidents.
Secondly
, these programs can distribute the volume of traffic around the city evenly to lighten the number of
vehicles
in
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 highways and streets. So, driverless transportation can benefit humanity greatly in terms of life and time. In conclusion,
although
 some individuals will not have the opportunity to drive their
cars
 on the streets, or hesitate to enter those
vehicles
, the positive points that
vehicles
 without
drivers
 will give humanity is unmeasurable which are
people
`s lives and time.
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language
Work on minimizing grammatical errors and typos. For instance: 'drvie' should be 'drive', and 'the the' is a repeated article.
writing skills
Try different ways to improve your sentence structure for better readability, ensuring each point flows smoothly into the next without repetition.
examples
Include more specific, real-world examples to support your arguments. This can help make your points more persuasive and relatable.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the arguments well.
cohesion
Your points are logically structured and follow a coherent sequence.
task response
You've effectively outlined both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showcasing a balanced view.

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