Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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criminals are terrified
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and start to reduce the crimes from happening in the street, on the other side some people
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that criminals are not terrified from
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Work on developing a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. This will help to clearly present your position and summarize your main points.
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Strengthen your main points with specific examples and evidence. This will make your argument more persuasive and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a logical structure. Use paragraphs to separate different points and make your progression of ideas clearer.
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Aim for more detailed and nuanced ideas to make your position clear. This can include discussing potential counterarguments and addressing them effectively.
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You have made a clear attempt to support your viewpoint on the necessity of more police on the streets to reduce crime.
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Your writing shows a personal voice and perspective, which makes your essay more engaging.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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