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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
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The line graph depicts the
number
 of
thefts
 per thousand cars in four different countries, Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada, from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, throughout the given
period
, it can be seen that Great Britain accounted for the greatest
number
 of
car
thefts
. Despite
this
, Sweden was the only country to witness an increase,
whereas
 the other three fluctuated. In 1990, there
was
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were
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 approximately 8000 reported crimes of carjacking per thousand vehicles and
this
then
 increased gradually to around 12000 in 1996. By the half end of the given
period
, the
number
 of
car
thefts
 remained stable until 1999 which increased to just under 15000. Regarding Great Britain, from 1990, numbers were at around 17500 which
then
 kept climbing up to about 20000 in 1992. In the following year, the amount of
car
thefts
 witnessed a dramatic drop to approximately 16000. From 1993 to 1996, the
number
 saw a substantial increase to
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 levels as in 1992 which
then
 fell back down
1993
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to 1993
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 levels by the end of the
period
.
Number
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The number
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 of
car
thefts
 in Canada and France fluctuated throughout the entire
period
 and ended with with about the same
number
 of
car
thefts
 as the beginning with around 6000.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thefts, period, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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