Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animals. Is it justified or there is any alternative? To what extent do you agree or diagree?

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, that
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invention of new remedies is important for society,
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however
the way of testing new
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is controversial. I believe, that
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on
animals
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only
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appropriate approach to create a new
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or a cosmetic and it should not be prohibited by law.
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experimental medicine has to be used on
animals
instead
of humans.
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is because society
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with more and more types of diseases, which have to be treated by new
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; testing them on humans could be
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dangerous
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For instance
, antibiotics, which almost all people use, have
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uneffective
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, and scientists invented four
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of antibiotics, testing them on rats.
In contrast
, if experimentations on
animals
were
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outlawed
, humanity would not have more than half of
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.
As a result
, fighting with strong
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and viruses is
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when we do
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experimentation
experimentations
on
animals
.
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,
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of creatures of nature in creating new remedies has no negative effect on
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the evironment
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evironment
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environment
.
In other words
, laboratories which organize experiments bread mice and other species, not
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population
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of wild mice or
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rabbits
rats
. To illustrate that, the research
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of Nazarbayev University grows many types of rats, which scientists use.
Moreover
, experiments do not
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suffering, because modern
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makes
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objects of
experimentations
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resistant to pain. Alternatively, if testing on
animals
was
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dangerous
for
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or for
animals
, it would
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prohibited many years ago. In conclusion, I would stick to my opinion, that governments should not create restrictions or
moreover
outlaw the modern practice of inventing remedies. Despite
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of opponents, it is hard to deny, that
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experimentations
experimentation
on humans will have more harm
the
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on
animals
.
Furthermore
, the phenomenon has no effect on
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the environment
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and
animals
do not suffer.
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