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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and charts provide information on the police
budget
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 in a specific area of Britain for the years 2017 and 2018, showing the sources of funding and how the money was spent.
Overall
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, the total
budget
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 increased from £304.7
million
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 in 2017 to £318.6
million
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 in 2018. The largest source of funding in both years was the national government, which slightly increased from £175.5
million
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 to £177.8
million
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. Local taxes showed a significant rise from £91.2
million
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 in 2017 to £102.3
million
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 in 2018,
while
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 other sources,
such
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 as grants, saw a modest increase from £38
million
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 to £38.5
million
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. In terms of expenditure, the majority of the
budget
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 was allocated to salaries,
although
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this
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 share decreased from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. Spending on technology,
however
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, increased from 8% to 14%, indicating a growing investment in
this
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 area. The allocation for buildings and transport remained steady at 17% in both years. In summary, the police
budget
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 grew
overall
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, with notable increases in local taxes and investment in technology,
while
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 the proportion spent on salaries decreased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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