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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of genres of movies released and the total number of ticket
sales
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 in the
years
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 1996 and 2006 in a random country.
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, it is clear from the graphs that the
percentage
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 of films released in 1996 was less than after one decade of releases.
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, of course,
this
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also
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 impacted ticket
sales
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, which had a higher
percentage
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 of
sales
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 in 2006. In 1996, drama had the biggest
percentage
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 at nearly 25% and
this
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 number increased to 35% after ten
years
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.
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, comedy was the less significant genre with 20% and it
also
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 grew to exactly a quarter in 2006. Fantasy movies were twice smaller and had approximately 12% and 15%, in the
years
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 1996 and 2006, respectively. For romance, the
percentage
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 was the same for both
years
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 at about 7%. The biggest
sales
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 of tickets showed comedy at roughly 23% and
this
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 was 20% in the year 1996. Drama was
also
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 the main one with around 16% in 1996 and 17% in 2006. Fantasy and romance had not so many ticket
sales
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 and had almost 3% and 5%, in 1996, sequentially. For fantasy, it went up to nearly 7%, but for romance, it decreased to almost 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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