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The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the average
of
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calories
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 intake in eight different nations in 2003.
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, it can be seen that the
higest
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highest
 proportion of
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calories
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 consumption was United States followed by New Zealand.
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, Indonesia accounted for the lowest percentage. Citizens in the USA ate slightly under 3500
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calories
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.
The similar
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 trends happened in New Zealand where inhabitants consumed roughly 3000
of
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calories
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.
These condition
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 became the widest amount than other countries shown during 2003.
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, there was a small
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 between Spain and Mexico in terms of average of nation's production of
calories
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, the vast majority of
population
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 in Indonesia and Somalia only had
intake
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 of food which contained energy for
body
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 around over 1500 and almost 2000 respectively.
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, people in China had
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2
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thousands
energy
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of energy
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 in their bodies
acquared
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acquired
 by both food and
beverage
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 which they consumed every day.
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