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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of audience enjoying
television
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 and
radio
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 during different time frames throughout the day, from October to December of 1992, in the UK. The audience includes
people
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 above the age of four.
Overall
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,
radio
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 is the popular choice in the morning,
whereas
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television
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 is preferred in the evening from 5 pm until midnight.
Moreover
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, a higher fraction of the
population
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 prefers watching
television
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, in comparison to listening to the
radio
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. Early in the morning, around 6 am about 6% of
people
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 start listening to the
radio
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, and the number gradually increases to about 28% around 9 am.
This
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 is the peak time for
radio
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 listeners, and
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this
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, the audience keeps slowly decreasing with about 12% of
people
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 listening around 4 pm, and
finally
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 reaching 1% at 2 am.
On the contrary
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, the
population
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 of the UK starts watching
television
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 after 6am. There is about 7%
population
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 enjoying it at around 7 am
Although
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 the statistics dip a little to 5% around 11 am, there is a significant surge with approximately 56% of
people
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 enjoying
television
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 shows at 7 pm. As the night progresses, the fraction gradually decreases to about 1% at 3 am. In conclusion, a vast majority of
people
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 residing in the UK enjoy watching
television
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, preferably in the second half of the day.
In contrast
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,
radio
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 is preferred during the first half of the day, by a rather small
population
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, radio, people, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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