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The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables display the sale figures for both
coffee
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 and bananas that were labelled by Fairtrade in five Caucasian
countires
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countries
, namely, the United Kingdom, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden. The data compares the sales of 1999 to those of 5 years later.
Overall
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, based on the data, the
coffee
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sale
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sales
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figues
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figures
 increased in all
countires
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countries
,
while
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 those of bananas demonstrated an increase in some
countires
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countries
,
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apply
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 and a decrease in others. Looking into the data
of
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on
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coffee
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 sales with more depth, the United Kingdom demonstrates the highest surge within a
five year
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five-year
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 duration, jumping from 1.5
million
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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 in 2004.
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, Switzerland marks the
second highest
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 increase in
coffee
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 sales, marking a 3
million
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 increase during the same time period. Other European countries
such
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 as Sweden, Denmark, and Belgium all
experiened
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experienced
 a similar growth of under one
million
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 each.
On the other hand
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, the
sale
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sales
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 figures for bananas showed a wider variation.
For instance
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, Switzerland displayed a remarkable and dramatic growth of over 30
million
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 euros,
while
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 the UK and Belgium both increased by approximately 4
million
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, more or less.
However
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, Sweden and Denmark both decreased by about 1
million
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 each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • substantial rise
  • stable sales
  • modest increase
  • significant increase
  • decline in sales
  • trends
  • comparisons
  • features
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