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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure . Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to . To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Travelling to foreign
countries
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 becomes one of
good
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the good
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 options for some people
for having
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a
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pleasure.
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, others believe that
this
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 has many drawbacks to the
countries
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 travelled to. I strongly disagree with
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 statement because having foreign
visitors
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 will
give
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make
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big
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a big
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 contribution to the national economy and
obtain
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provide
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 good networking in global organisations. First of all,
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector has a significant contribution to the national economy because it creates many employment opportunities. It is because foreign
visitors
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 will spend
much
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a lot of
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 money to
fulfill
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 their necessities during
travelling
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,
such
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 as hotel, food, and beverages.
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, people who live in the
countries
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 travelled
can
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 obtain good employment by accommodating foreign
visitors
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.
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, people who work as
a
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travel
guide
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guides
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, resort owners, and waiters in
restaurant
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restaurants
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 can get benefits from foreign tourists by serving them
during
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while
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 travelling.
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,
countries
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 travelled will be more well-known as global citizens will be known the country as
a
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one of the best travel destinations to visit.
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, it
delivers
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has
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 a good impact
to
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on
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 the establishment of the country in global
organisation
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organisations
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,
such
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 as
United
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the United
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 Nations (UN). By becoming famous, the travelled
countries
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 will have opportunities to introduce their
countries
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further
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 by encouraging other nations to visit their country.
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, in terms of political stance, the travelled
countries
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 will
also
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 have
big
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a big
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 chance to deliver ideas and determine their own political stance in the UN
due to
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 their establishment. In conclusion, foreign
visitors
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 do not always
give
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have
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 negative impacts
to
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on
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 the travelled
countries
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. The
countries
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 will obtain many benefits in terms of economic contribution and their establishment in
global
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the global
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 network.

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task achievement
Incorporate counterarguments or opposing views to showcase a balanced perspective and deepen your analysis.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next to maintain the flow of ideas.
introduction conclusion
Strong introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the essay.
supported main points
Main points are clear and relevant examples are utilized to support the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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