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Some people are happy to spend their whole life in the same area, others prefer to live in many different places in thair life time? discuss both sides of view and give your opinion

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their families
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their
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lifestyle
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afraid
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new things in life , get to know new people new places new
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cultures
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Organize the essay better by giving clear introductions and conclusions. Begin with an introductory paragraph, followed by distinct paragraphs for each argument, and end with a concluding paragraph.
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Develop your arguments with more specific examples and details. This would help in creating clearer and more comprehensive ideas.
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Work on using varied vocabulary and maintaining grammatical accuracy. Proofreading your work will help identify and correct spelling and grammatical errors.
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You have provided arguments for both sides of the topic, which shows an understanding of the task.
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Your personal opinion is clearly stated, adding a personal touch to the essay and completing the task requirements.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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