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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps illustrate the layout of tourist facilities in an
island
was
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that was
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 constructed in different
period
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periods
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.
It is clear that
 the
island
 has changed considerably with the introduction of tourism. over 70% of
island
areas
 were developed into accommodation and other facilities in the second diagram. Looking at the maps in more detail, we can see that the
nomurous
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numerous
 bungalow
were
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was
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 constructed all around the left
site
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side
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 of
island
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the island
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 for the visitors who come to travel. The reception
has been
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is
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 located at the centre between accommodations and next to the restaurant
were
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was
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builded
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built
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nearby
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near
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 the sea.
In addition
, at the
eadge
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end
 of
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the island
an island
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island
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island,
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 the beach was renovated for visitors who want
swimming
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to swim
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.
As well as
 the transportation
were
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was
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builded
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built
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 all around
the buildings
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the areas of the building
the areas of the buildings
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areas
. The pier was constructed at the front of
island
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the island
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 and
use
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used
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 for the entrance. The vehicle tracks
were
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apply
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developed
connection
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a connection
the connection
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 between the pier and the reception and go through the end at the restaurant.
Moreover
, all of
areas
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the areas
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 of accommodation including the beach were linked by the footpaths and visitors
able
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were able
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 to walk around the resort
areas
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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