Young people often have ideas or attitudes that are different to those of their parents or grandparents. How do ideas and attitudes differ between generations in your society? Do you think that these differences cause any problems?
There has been always a generational gap between young people,
parents
and grant
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grand
parents
, but especially in the past few years
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years,
this
phenomena
has become more evident. Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
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essay explains how ideas and attitudes have changed over time and in which terms such
a distance might cause conflicts.
First of all, the use of technology has had a huge impact in determining different perspectives. For example
, the older generations
still rely on the news spread via newspapers and TV, while
the younger generations
get information through several sources: telegram chat, social media
, online blog
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blogs
podcast
etc... Fix the agreement mistake
podcasts
For
this
reason, quite often, the conversations between adolescents and their parents
are based upon different entry points that might lead to conflictual situations. This
can happen especially if the older generations
are not able to navigate in
the new Change preposition
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media
. In fact, another reason that creates a sort of exclusion of the parents
from the life
of their kids is exactly a lack of understanding of how social Fix the agreement mistake
lives
media
and online device
work. Fix the agreement mistake
devices
For example
, already at
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in
the
primary school, the use of social Correct article usage
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media
like TikTok or Instagram is highly widespread, while
it is difficult to find Correct word choice
and
contents
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content
in
these platforms made by aged people.
Another reasonChange preposition
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,
is in the life expectation. People born in the 40's, 50's, Remove the comma
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60's
have experienced a completely different historical context Correct word choice
and 60's
compare
to the generation born in the 80's 90's 00's. Change the form of the verb
compared
While
the so called
"baby Add a hyphen
so-called
boomer
" Fix the agreement mistake
boomers
benefit
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benefited
an
economic Correct article usage
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grow
and did not have an ecological mindset, nowadays, Replace the word
growth
millenials
or Correct your spelling
millennials
the
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generations
X,Y,Z
are facing the consequences of the previous decades of consumerism which made them not only more precariousCorrect word choice
and Z
,
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above all
more political
conscious of the global conditions. In fact, Change the adjective
politically
the
social Correct article usage
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mouvements
like "Friday for Future" or "Extinction Rebellion" emerged from the needs and Correct your spelling
movements
the
desires of very young activists poised to struggle against Correct article usage
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the
climate change and the social injustice that the previous generation Correct article usage
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allow
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allowed
to
establish. These different perspectives Correct pronoun usage
them to
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harsh
behaviours and Change preposition
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consequently
some conflictual relationship
within the same families.
In conclusion, the ever-evolving society, accelerated particularly by technology and global changing acknowledgement, creates the conditions to nurture differences between Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
generations
which can evolve in
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