Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree of disagree ? What other measures do you think might be effective ?

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Nowadays, there are so many
problems
that occur in the world. One of the examples,
problems
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related to
petrol
price
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. It plays a big role in controlling
traffic
and pollution
problems
. Many of them believe it is irrelevant. In my view, it will play a big role
to
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their decision to use vehicles;
therefore
, it will impact
traffic
and
pollutions
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as
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below. First of all,
petrol
price
is our main consideration when we choose and buy the vehicles too. One of
the
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, if we
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lack
in
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finance
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, we will definitely choose small cars with small engines; since we can save money
from
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petrol
cost
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.
This
will reduce
pollutions
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pollution
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and
spaces
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;
hence
small cars
mean
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will save
spaces
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and reduce
traffic
.
Moreover
, it produces lower
pollutions
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pollution
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with small machines on it.
On the other hand
, many might claim
petrol
cost
only make
live
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cost
higher and harsher to many.
To begin
with, if we
rise
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its
price
, we can
also
give other measures like promoting electric
transports
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transport
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or
EV
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EVs
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easily. It can solve pollution
problems
that
is
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caused by conventional engines. So, we can adjust and control the problem by playing the
petrol
price
. Yet, it is claimed that higher
cost
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costs
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will only trigger them to higher crime
rate
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rates
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;
hence
they will try to fulfil their needs. In conclusion, I believe higher
petrol
price
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prices
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will help to prevent people use vehicles,
reduce
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and reduce
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pollutions
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pollution
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, and
traffic
altogether. Whilst, some
are disagree
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with it; since they
are prefer
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prefer
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cheaper
cost
without care about the environment.
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complete response
The essay addresses the task by discussing both the increase in petrol price and suggesting another measure (promoting electric transports).
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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