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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total import of vegetables in Qatari from 1980 until the next 40 years.
Overall
, there were different trends
of
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 the total import for every type of
vegetables
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,
for instance
, the total of imported spinach decreased, but the total of
brocoli
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broccoli
 and garlic increased. First of all, the imported spinach was distributed around 500
tonnes
 in 1980 but it gradually went down until reached not more than 400
tonnes
 in 2020.
However
, the trend of imported
brocoli
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broccoli
 and garlic showed
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the oppositely
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oppositely
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. The former
was
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started to import
by
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around 200
tonnes
 in 1980 and
it
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reached
the
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 peak in 2020
by
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 around 300
tonnes
, and the latter
was
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imported approximately 300
tonnes
 in 1980
then
 increased
around
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 100
tonnes
 more in 2020.
Moreover
, other commodities
such
 as the amount of peas and ginger did not show any significant movements. The imported peas remained steady by not more than 200
tonnes
 in 40 years. Same with the peas, imported ginger had a stable demand for around 200
until
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 300
tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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