The bar chart below shows transportation preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.
The bar chart illustrates the teenager’s transport choices, which are car, motorcycle, bicycle, in the UK, United States, France and Italy in one particular year.
Overall
, cars
are the most popular mode of transportation
that teenagers
prefer in the UK, United States and Italy. However
, most French teenagers
prefer traveling
by Change the spelling
travelling
bicycles
. Fix the agreement mistake
bicycle
In addition
, motorcycles
are the least popular mode of transportation
among British, American and French teenagers
.
In the UK, 60% of British teenagers
prefer traveling
by Change the spelling
travelling
cars
, Fix the agreement mistake
car
while
only 30% and 10% prefer using bicycles
and motorcycles
, respectively. Similarly
, 60% of American teenagers
prefer using cars
for transportation
, whereas
30% and 10% prefer traveling
by Change the spelling
travelling
motorcycles
and Fix the agreement mistake
motorcycle
bicycles
. Fix the agreement mistake
bicycle
However
, 45% of French teenegers
prefer using Correct your spelling
teenagers
bicycles
, which is four times more than those who prefer motorcycles
. Cars
are the second most popular mode of transportation
among French teenagers
. Nevertheless
, more than 70% of Italian teenagers
prefer cars
, while
less than 30% prefer motorcycles
and bicycles
combined.Submitted by bellchatpavee on
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