The bar chart below shows transportation preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.

The bar chart below shows transportation preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.
The bar chart illustrates the teenager’s transport choices, which are car, motorcycle, bicycle, in the UK, United States, France and Italy in one particular year.
Overall
,
cars
are the most popular mode of
transportation
that
teenagers
prefer in the UK, United States and Italy.
However
, most French
teenagers
prefer
traveling
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travelling
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by
bicycles
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bicycle
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.
In addition
,
motorcycles
are the least popular mode of
transportation
among British, American and French
teenagers
. In the UK, 60% of British
teenagers
prefer
traveling
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travelling
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by
cars
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car
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,
while
only 30% and 10% prefer using
bicycles
and
motorcycles
, respectively.
Similarly
, 60% of American
teenagers
prefer using
cars
for
transportation
,
whereas
30% and 10% prefer
traveling
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travelling
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by
motorcycles
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motorcycle
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and
bicycles
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bicycle
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.
However
, 45% of French
teenegers
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teenagers
prefer using
bicycles
, which is four times more than those who prefer
motorcycles
.
Cars
are the second most popular mode of
transportation
among French
teenagers
.
Nevertheless
, more than 70% of Italian
teenagers
prefer
cars
,
while
less than 30% prefer
motorcycles
and
bicycles
combined.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, transportation, teenagers, bicycles, motorcycles with synonyms.
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