The bar chart below shows transportation preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.

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The bar chart illustrates the teenager’s transport choices, which are car, motorcycle, bicycle, in the UK, United States, France and Italy in one particular year.

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cars

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are the most popular mode of

transportation

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that

teenagers

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prefer in the UK, United States and Italy.

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, most French

teenagers

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prefer

traveling

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travelling

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bicycles

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bicycle

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motorcycles

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are the least popular mode of

transportation

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among British, American and French

teenagers

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. In the UK, 60% of British

teenagers

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prefer

traveling

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travelling

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cars

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car

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while

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only 30% and 10% prefer using

bicycles

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and

motorcycles

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, respectively.

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, 60% of American

teenagers

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prefer using

cars

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for

transportation

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whereas

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30% and 10% prefer

traveling

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travelling

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motorcycles

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motorcycle

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and

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bicycles

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bicycle

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However

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, 45% of French

teenegers

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teenagers

prefer using

bicycles

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, which is four times more than those who prefer

motorcycles

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Cars

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are the second most popular mode of

transportation

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among French

teenagers

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Nevertheless

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, more than 70% of Italian

teenagers

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prefer

cars

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while

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less than 30% prefer

motorcycles

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and

bicycles

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combined.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, transportation, teenagers, bicycles, motorcycles with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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