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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts indicate
air
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pollution
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levels
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 in 2021 separate from four different countries and have three main reasons
industry
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, transport and
electricity
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generation
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.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that China has the highest
air
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pollution
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levels
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 with problems of
industry
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as well as
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Japan
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 that have the same reasons for
air
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pollution
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.
However
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,
America
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 has a
levels
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pollution
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 lower than China but more than two countries with problems of transport. Alternatively, Australia has lower
levels
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 of
air
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pollution
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 than another three countries.
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 with, China as mentioned on top land has peak
levels
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 of
air
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pollution
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 of close to 60% of
electricity
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generation
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, 70% of transportation and 80% which is five times more than Australia. Meanwhile,
air
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pollution
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 in Australia
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is the same factor where the total average of
electricity
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generation
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, transportation and
industry
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 is around 20% of all.
On the other hand
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,
America
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 has
levels
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 of
pollution
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 from transport close to 60%
while
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Japan
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 has only 20%
this
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 percentage is the same as the
levels
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 of
industry
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 in
America
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.
Furthermore
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, the number of
electricity
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generation
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 in
America
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 is 30% more than in
Japan
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 around two times 15% and the level of
industry
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 in
Japan
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 is 45% more than in
America
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 when compared.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, levels, industry, electricity, generation, japan, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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