Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their tranining. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss bıth views and give your opinion.
Some people
argued
that Wrong verb form
argue
professionals
should stay and work
their
home Change preposition
in their
country
while
others believe that if they want to work
foreign country
they should be. I strongly believe second
statement and Add an article
the second
this
essay I will try to explain why.
On the one hand, it is true that there are several difficult Change preposition
in this
situation
in working foreign Change to a plural noun
situations
country
. Firstly
, they might do
not have Unnecessary verb
apply
advanced
level in foreign language and it might provide Add an article
an advanced
lingual
barrier Correct article usage
a lingual
professionals
and their clients/patients. Change preposition
to professionals
For example
, In Turkey
some doctors have moved to Germany to Add a comma
Turkey,
working
and Germany Government has Wrong verb form
work
requiested
Correct your spelling
requested
intermediate
German language. Correct article usage
an intermediate
Thus
, doctors have suffered from get
contact with their patients even if they know about medical language. Change the verb form
getting
Secondly
, some people believe their education better
than another Add a missing verb
is better
country
so they do not might want the
Fix the infinitive
to the
professionals
. Professionals
even face to
racism in foreign Change preposition
apply
country
regardless of their major and education levels.
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
On the other hand
, professional
takes Add an article
the professional
really
complex Add an article
the really
exam
to have a chance Fix the agreement mistake
exams
in
Fix the infinitive
to in
work
a foreign country
and they depict about
the ratio of Change preposition
apply
tough
Add an article
the tough
a tough
situation
but even though, they try. There Fix the agreement mistake
situations
are
no reason to Change the verb form
is
do
not accept Unnecessary verb
apply
not-domestic
Correct your spelling
non-domestic
professionals
. For example
, if you want to be a lawyer in The United States of America, you have to complete 24 hours general
American Law L.L.M and you have to pass Change preposition
of general
New
York Bar exam which is quite hard. Foreign Correct article usage
the New
proffessional
waste their time and spend their money Correct your spelling
professional
professionals
for
start a new life. If Change preposition
to
governments'
provide good opportunities in their hometown, they do not attempt Change noun form
governments
such
as long and difficult journey.
In conclusion, I believe that there are several difficulties in being a professional in foreign countries. However
, they should be free to work
in another country
if they wish.Submitted by berivan_yilmazz on
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