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The line graph below shows the average temperature (in °C) in three cities over a twelve-month period in 2020. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average temperature (in °C) in three cities over a twelve-month period in 2020. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the average
temperature
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 in 2020 in Celsius
degrees
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 in
Istanbul
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, Myanmar and
Doha
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.
Overall
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, it is notable that in
Istanbul
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 and
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Doha
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Doha,
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 the summer season brought the highest
temperature
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,
while
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 the city of Myanmar experienced a stable trend throughout the period. In regards to
Istanbul
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 and
Doha
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, these two cities had similar variations in
temperature
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 in 2020. In January, the average
temperature
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 in
Istanbul
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 and
Doha
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 was about 6 and 17
celsius
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Celsius
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degrees
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, respectively.
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, it increased steadily to around 37
degrees
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 by July, and
Doha
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 hit the maximum average
temperature
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 of 40
degrees
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in
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this
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 month.
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, in
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Istanbul
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Istanbul,
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 the maximum average
temperature
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 was in August. Until the end of the year, the average
temperature
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 had constantly decreased in both cities to the same
temperature
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 as it was in January. In Myanmar, in January, the mean
temperature
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 was just above that in
Istanbul
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.
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, it increased to approximately 19 by March.
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 it went constantly until reaching a high of 24
degrees
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 in August. Plus, it decreased to around 7 by December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, degrees, istanbul, doha with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average temperature
  • climatic patterns
  • temperature range
  • notable spikes or dips
  • gradual increase/decrease
  • comparative analysis
  • monthly variations
  • seasonal changes
  • climate differences
  • yearly trends
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