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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

#plans #show #harbour
The maps illustrate how
harbour
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the harbour
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 which is located along the seashore
have
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has
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 developed from 200 to the present.
Overall
, it is clearly visible that the
harbour
 become more
accesible
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accessible
 through additional docking options and shifted generally from being used for commercial fishing and private
yacht
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yachts
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 to waterfront
resort
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resorts
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. In the past, there was a single dock in the north part of the
harbour
, just below a public beach expanding towards the north. Currently, the public beach remains the same but
number
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the number
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 of docks have been doubled. South and west of the
harbour
, there
were
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was
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 previously,
marina
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a marina
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 for private
yacht
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yachts
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, showers and toilets and a car park connected to the main road which
running
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ran
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 north to south. The only change today is that the marina has now
replaced
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been replaced
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 with fishing boats to the south. In the eastern part of the
harbour
, the new hotel has been built and the small road which
lead
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leads
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 to
hotel
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the hotel
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now
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is now
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binded
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bound
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 to cafes,shops that
were
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have
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 appeared currently and
existing
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an existing
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 lifeboat.
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task achievement
The introduction provides a good general overview of the topic. However, it could be more polished by specifying '2000' instead of '200' and by improving the grammatical accuracy ('how harbour' should be 'how the harbour').
coherence cohesion
While you have highlighted the changes adequately, some sections lack clarity and precision. For example, 'number of docks have been doubled' could be more detailed: 'the number of docks has increased from one to two.'
coherence cohesion
Transitions can be improved to make the essay flow better. For instance, instead of 'South and west of the harbour,' try 'In the southwestern part of the harbour.'
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider structuring paragraphs more clearly. Use separate paragraphs to discuss changes in different areas of the harbour.
task achievement
Be consistent with tenses when discussing past and present. For example, 'The small road which lead to hotel now binded to cafes' should be 'The small road which leads to the hotel now connects to cafes.'
task achievement
The essay captures the main changes between 2000 and today in a structured manner.
coherence cohesion
You have used a range of vocabulary to describe the changes, such as 'expanded,' 'replaced,' and 'appeared.'

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