the diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram illustrates the process of making
water
to drink from the collected and handled rainwater in an Australian neighbourhood.
In general, that is
a largely mechanical process including 4 big stages, beginning with capturing the rainwater and ending with delivering drinking water
to houses.
Having looked at the given chart for more details, first of all, there is the drain that delivers the rainwater flowing down to a huge underground network connecting to each house. Secondly
, the liquid from all the houses is transported through a long pipe to the water
filter where the aqua is filtered then
it will be transferred to a deeply underground storage.
Next,
a small pipe will be responsible for water
transfer to the second tank called the aqua treatment region. Then
the liquid is mixed with added chemicals to produce the clean liquid. Finally
, this
drinking water
flows back along a path to each accommodation for the daily routines of residents.Submitted by ieltswritingpracticedl on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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