Some people think that homework is necessary for students, while others believe it puts too much pressure on them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people reckon that
homework
is necessary for
students
, but there are
also
objections that
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others believe
homework
is considered as an extra pressure on
students
' shoulders.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument before presenting my opinion. Those who think
homework
at school is necessary believe that giving
homeworks
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homework
to
students
leads them to learn the subject in a practical way and
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students
with remembering hard topics.
For instance
, some
students
, like me, reluctantly listen to a teacher at lessons. Indeed, for those
students
, I think, doing
homework
can be beneficial, because most of them do not
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attention to a teacher, not because they do not want to study, but it is because of their goodness at self-study.
In addition
, even if scholars are good listeners, they might have forgotten what they learnt, and in
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getting
homework
from teachers may be beneficial.
Conversely
, those who think giving
homework
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an unwanted pressure that
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on
students
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confidence in doing
homeworks
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homework
can move
students
away from their parents and their own
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, taking
students
’ precious childhood time.
For example
, some
students
are afraid of getting lower bands from several subjects, and they try to do all the
homeworks
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homework
in exchange for
time
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that can be spent on their mental rest. In my opinion, doing
homework
is not as important as some individuals think, but it can damage
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mental health getting their
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unforgettable
school times.
However
, it is
also
necessary for the government to enhance the system of education in a convenient and effective way of teaching without any
homeworks
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homework
and troubles that can happen
while
teaching
students
. In conclusion, there are so many types of people, for some
students
homeworks
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homework
can invoke its benefits, but for those who are prone to have
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while
studying it can cause
its
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damages
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.
Overall
, it will be a great decision to avoid
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for all
students
, despite
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homeworks
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homework
government should improve education.
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Ensure that transitions between sentences and paragraphs are smooth to improve the logical flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'homeworks' and 'goodness at self-study'. Instead, use 'homework' (uncountable) and 'aptitude for self-study'.
task achievement
Clearly state your opinion in the introduction to provide a clear direction for the essay.
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Provide more detailed examples to better support your points and make your arguments more compelling.
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You effectively present both sides of the argument, which is essential in a discussion essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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