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Many people claim that ordering food is a better option than preparing it themselves. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people want to order
food
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 rather than
doing
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do
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 it by hand, and they think it is a better option.I mostly disagree with
this
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 statement and believe it is not the healthy way of nourishing, but
also
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 sometimes it has its own upsides. In recent years, ordering and delivering
food
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 have become more popular than going to restaurants. Indeed, it is the most convenient way to eat because people who
ordered
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order
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food
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instead
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doing
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of doing
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 it
in
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at
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 home condition have not to spend much time
hust
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just
 to eat something.
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, they can have a rest or do something they want that gives them pleasure.
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, occasionally, if I order
food
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 when I am struggling with undone tasks, I feel better for not making dishes, and it will be a good chance to earn more money as a replacement for doing
food
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 at home for some individuals.
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,
this
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 endeavour seems not excellent at times. From a larger perspective, ignoring its convenience, in my opinion, cooking meals has more advantages than ordering
it
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them
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.
Firstly
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, it saves a lot of money that can be paid for restaurants.
Secondly
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, cooking
food
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 by yourself shows a clear recipe of what you eat, and it is important for those who have an allergy or negative effect to some kinds of additives.
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, because of my weak digestive system
that
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which
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 sometimes struggles to metabolize unwanted foods, I do not want to eat fish for dinner. In conclusion, it will be better to choose to make
food
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 at home by yourself because it will be healthier and more delicious and has an explicit recipe, even though ordering
food
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 is
convenient
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a convenient
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 way of consuming
food
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.

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