The line graph and pie charts show the cost for watching films and choices of people's of watching movies.

The line graph and pie charts show the cost for watching films and choices of people's of watching movies.
The line
graph
and pie charts show the cost
for
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of
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watching films and
choices
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the choices
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of
people's
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people
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of
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in
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watching movies.
Overall
, what stands out from the line
graph
is that all options saw an upward trend over a six-year period. What stands out from the pie chart is that renting a
DVD
was the most popular category in 2005, but by 2011 it was replaced by legal downloading. Looking at the line
graph
, cinema tickets started at 9, and by 2011, figures saw a gradual increase to 14. Legal download began at 7, after which it witnessed a sharp decrease by 4, and
then
it grew considerably to 9.
DVD
saw a moderate growth from 6 to 8. Regarding the pie charts, in 2005, renting a
DVD
was the number-one category on the list, which accounted for over half of the
graph
,
while
legal download contains only half of
a
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one-tenth.
However
, in 2011, renting a
DVD
declined significantly to one quarter,
while
the latter boomed to 56%.
Nevertheless
,
figures
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the figures
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of
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for
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going to
cinema
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the cinema
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halved, from 36% to 18%.
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