Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it polluted the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both view and give your opinions.

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Nowadays, individuals consider choosing an
unexpensive
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air
flight
for multiple reasons. People address that cheap
air
flight
provides freedom
while
others argue
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it is
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inconvenient
air
flight
and should be blocked for critical
issues
it includes.
This
essay will propose the benefits and
drawbacks
of
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inconvenience
inconvenient
air
flight
companies
as the
drawbacks
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the benefits. On one hand, individuals tend to choose cheap
air
flight
companies
for several reasons. Because poor quality plane
scheduale
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schedule
their journies during all
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apply
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day, it
considered
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was considered
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a remarkable choice for them.
For example
, many airports have addressed that people
whom
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want to buy a ticket usually buy it 2 hours before the plane
start
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moving.
While freelancers
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Freelancers
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consider taking a full plane without other passengers, makes it a fabulous choice for them
which
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when
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other fancy
companies
may have restricted planes. Saudi Arabia reported recently about many freelancers
whom
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who
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own planes
undercharge
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under charge
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of poor quality
companies
.
On the other hand
, there are
issues
of choosing a cheap fight, so people address their opinion
as
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that
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it should be banned for environmental causes. Environmental problems may cause
a
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apply
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severe
issues
that harm the atmosphere
,
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and, as
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as a consequence
affects
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affect
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the population's health. Numerous
academeic
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academic
media articles have shown that after the cheap
flight
companies
increased the pollution increased
as a result
.
Moreover
,
its
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it is
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not just an
enironmental
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environmental
problem but
also
a severe health
issues
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issue
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,
due to
not fully trained pilots they tend to commit a lot of accidents. It should be banned
due to
the unavoidable problems that it
responsible
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is responsible
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for. In conclusion, in the short term poor
air
flight
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flights
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provide a good
seveses
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service
that makes it
better
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a better
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choice for travellers,
however
, there are unavoidable
drawbacks
that could cause. It
include
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a severe
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severe drawbacks
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drawbacks
related to
environment
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the environment
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that
makes
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make
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it vitally important to be banned.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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The introduction and conclusion are present and provide some framing for the essay.

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